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Post by Werrrdna on Mar 22, 2011 15:29:28 GMT -5
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Post by mahrundl on Mar 22, 2011 16:21:51 GMT -5
Werrrdna, an Exalt for you for doing this! I've read through it, and it looks like a fun adventure.
I noted 1 very minor issue: on page 4, you have:
The tavern is owned by Enzlow Thorndrake, a large eccentric human who bellows all his sentences and talk at length about his boot collection.
The blue word should be 'talks' rather than 'talk'. A terribly minor nitpick, I know.
On a more positive note, I do like the name Enzlow Thorndrake. It really works for me as an innkeeper's name. Also, that's a lot of boots! Imelda Marcos, take note!
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Post by Werrrdna on Mar 22, 2011 16:25:01 GMT -5
Egad! You're right! I feel shamed. Cheers for pointing that out. Will go over and do a revision. Thanks for the exalt!
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Hogscape
11th level Troll
Stalwart of the Trollbridge
It's not the years, it's the mileage.
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Post by Hogscape on Mar 25, 2011 6:33:31 GMT -5
Like it. Shall be using it. Shall be exalting.
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Post by Werrrdna on Mar 27, 2011 8:42:55 GMT -5
Thanks Hogscape! Let me know how it goes.
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cram
4th Level Troll
DON'T TOUCH ANYTHING!
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Post by cram on May 1, 2011 9:24:29 GMT -5
Just read this the other night, great work Werrrdna have an exalt.
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Post by fellgore on May 2, 2011 4:21:32 GMT -5
Thank you Werrdna! Exalt!
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order99
7th Level Troll
Coffee-fueled Carrion That Walks Like a Man
Posts: 1,025
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Post by order99 on May 3, 2011 22:43:14 GMT -5
Fantastic work Werrdna! (fires up the Exalting Chainsaw!) (clumsily reattaches own leg with Regretful Staplegun and Hindsight Glue) Shoulda' stuck with the Exalting Shotgun I guess...  |
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